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Technical Description

How Goal-line Technology Revolutionized Football 

Hussian Mohammed

English Technical Description

4/14/2021 

Table of contextsPages
Intro/History1 And 2
Representation of the game3 and 4
New Technology4 and 5
Pictures6
Bibliography7

The beautiful game or as the world calls it football is one of the highest international sports in the world. Almost every country has its own league with different teams fighting for number one and obtaining glory. In Spain, it has La Liga, England has the Premier League, and the United States has the MLS. The origin of the sport is a topic that is argued over the ages, some say the first signs of football were in Africa, while others believed it was in China. “Records trace the history of soccer back more than 2,000 years ago to ancient China. Greece, Rome, and parts of Central America also claim to have started the sport; but it was England that transitioned soccer, or what the British and many other people around the world call “football,” into the game we know today (How Soccer Originated, 2021).  However, nobody disagrees that the first modernization of the sport came in England with a league consisting of gentlemen. This league was made for the higher class of society (men) to play in the beautiful game and to win trophies. Occasionally local teams made up of factory workers would play in the league to compete against the higher class. This league started the main foundation of how we play the game and how it affected history and why so many people love the beautiful game. However, due to human error football matches would be fixed (rigged), and referees would not count points, despite being in the goal.  Action was needed to make no room for human error, a way for it to be impossible to make a mistake and it would take almost a century for new technology to be added to fix this problem.

In the beginning of modern football in the 1900s, the league regulators and the key  people who started the league played for one team and their title glory was very corrupted as they had the power to change the rules. A local team did the unthinkable and recruited two players from Scotland whose football ideology would change the game forever. “The tactical exposition in The English Game is clunking preposterous, but it’s not without substance: the passing game the northern teams came to favor (in part because they were smaller than their better-fed public-school counterparts and so would have been seriously disadvantaged if they had no way of maneuvering the ball away from physical clashes) was very different to the head-on charging practiced by the game’s progenitors (Wilson, 2020)”. “Pass the ball, move the ball” is the famous phrase used by the top elite coaches of the modern football world today, but it originated 100 years ago. “and it would go on to change, spreading across the world. The English game became the Austrian game, the Hungarian game, the Argentinian game, and, particularly, the Uruguayan game. It became everybody’s game, interpreted differently by every culture that embraced it. (Wilson, 2020)” Football was not just a game to these locals; it was something to look forward to since they grew up in poverty-stricken households. The league originated during the industrial age where new technology was revolutionizing humanity. This does not mean that the lives of people were very happy, most workers would work 10-hour shifts with very little pay and could barely support their own families. It was not just for the rich anymore, if a local poor person has talent and trained, they can become glorious and even help their own dying communities. Teamwork, passing the ball where there is space, and taking advantage of it, make the game so entertaining to anyone that watches. Simple football is the best, but also the hardest to do, and when a team performs like that it shows the passion in the game.

Now the identification of the name would not really matter in most cases, but it is absolutely absurd not calling this a football. The whole sport revolves around your foot and kicking the ball only the goalkeeper is the exception.  The whole world calls it football, however, in American culture, a football would be considered an egg-shaped ball, and it is used by hands. To identify the terms used in soccer it can be very difficult and hard to understand when learning English. A combination of British and American cultures is also seen not only in football but in other sports. The start of major leagues in the United States was because of the influence of British football. However, British football was not a major factor and did not appeal to many Americans as they popularized other sports such as basketball. Americans love to be unique, and you can see that in everything they do. The metric system is still not even in place throughout the United States even though it is the most accurate in science. American with little use of anything to measure something, that building will be about three tractors wide and five tractors up. It is very funny and entertaining to watch and listen to the different methods an American would use to measure something but not use the metric system.

The phrase “The beautiful game” is mentioned a lot when talking about football and that is no coincidence. The excitement of the game brings communities together and shows the true power of a sport. The unpredictability of the game is absolutely breathtaking to watch. Scientists have been studying for both for a long time and concluded there are some things that seem impossible to do become possible. Not one person can fully explain the science behind the game, so the best option is just to sit back and enjoy. Figure 1 represents a football, and the first image that pops up in my head of a football is the classic, Adidas Pentagon pattern. The classic black and white patterns represent the simplicity of other sports behind it. Black and white represent the past because the old technology was not capable of producing color, so in most pictures, we associate black and white images of the past. The soccer ball consists of a magnet that will inform the referee if the ball has passed the line for a goal on his watch. This is a revolutionary breakthrough in soccer history to make the game fairer and even to be played in the professional level. Football has a rich history and will always preserve it for future generations and advance their skills.

Goal-line technology has played a key role in advances in Soccer. “Goal-line technology or GLT is the use of technology to determine if the ball has crossed the goal line or not. The information quickly transmits within a split second to a special watch worn by the referee to ensure immediate response and no forms of interference in the game. GLT is a recent addition to soccer. It was only in July 2012 the International Football Association Board approved the use of goal-line technology provided it does not interfere with the game. As FIFA maintains, the objective of GLT is not to replace the role of the officials, but rather to support them in their decision-making. Because of its high cost, the technology is used only at the highest levels of the game. Other than FIFA World Cups, GLT has used the top European domestic leagues. (Datta, 2018) ” There are many devices required for the placement of the goal-line such as: “Several systems operate with magnetic fields. For these systems, cables are placed underground and around the goal, and the ball has elements of the technology inside. The interaction between the receptors in the ball and the magnetic fields created through the underground cables allow the software to calculate the exact position of the ball and determine when a goal has been scored. (Football Technology, 2013)

In conclusion, goal line technology was admitted to many professional leagues and has improved the game and made it fairer. However, recently in a world qualifier match, Portugal was tied against Serbia, and during the last couple of minutes Cristiano Ronaldo, a well-known soccer player, scored a last-minute goal against Serbia. “Cristiano Ronaldo was left fuming after his late winner for Portugal was wrongly chalked off in the game against Serbia” (Ajith, 2021). However, the referee did not realize that the ball crossed the line and a Serbian defender slid and cleared the ball. The goal should have stood, and this would have led Portugal one step closer to qualifying for the world cup. However, due to the lack of technology the referee disallowed the goal and the match ended in a draw 2-2. Critics were furious that a world cup qualifier event did not have goal line technology put into place and the Portuguese national team was in disbelief. To keep matches similar to these not repeating GLT was put into place and made the football community more than happy having a fairer game. Technology was created to help humanity and avoid human error. Therefore, playing a key role in allowing for the advancements in not only football but in mankind.




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Bibliography

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Reflection Technical description

April 30, 2021

The technical description essay touched upon many points from the origins of football, and how it has progressed over time. I have been playing soccer for almost 15 years and it has been a true passion of mine as a young child. My love for football has grown exponentially and it has motivated me to become a football coach today. It inspires and motivates me every day to see young children have a love for football just as I did. The audience I was reaching out to is you, the professor.  The genre used throughout the paper is informational, which is in regard to a specific topic being football. The main purpose of the technical description essay was to discuss the positive impact of goal line technology in football, and how it prevents human error from occurring.

The tone of my paper was very optimistic, and serious while discussing different factors of football. The purpose of my paper was also to educate the audience/reader on goal line technology, since it is rarely spoken about. The setting touched upon various countries and how they are trying to incorporate goal line technology in their leagues. Since football is a popular sport played amongst many people, football experts are always on the search for new technological advances to better the accuracy of games.

This particular assignment helps me achieve the course learning outcomes in various ways. Since I am very passionate and intrigued by football, researching about this topic was a breeze for me. My academic skills in drafting, revising, and editing have greatly improved over the span of a couple of months. I even learned how to properly cite sources after completing my research.

Starbucks

The faults of Schultz

In Howard’s Schultz Starbuck’s Memo, the writing structure lacked a clear understanding of literature organization and was not appropriate for technical writing. First his introduction was a brief small topic sentence that lacked a clear context of what he is writing about and did not define the “FY 08 Planning process”. Furthermore, the lengths of the paragraphs are very displeasing as they are not proportional, one sentence was a paragraph and one big, long body containing more than 9 sentences is a paragraph. According to David Murry who wrote “Structure and Flow are Everything” paragraph length only occurs when there’s a slight shift in the topic, if not doing so there will be no “clarity and comprehension” in any piece of technical writing. Schultz transitions and chronological organization is all over the place throughout his piece of writing and will need to do way better if he writes to a Starbuck’s CEO or any position of power in the Starbuck’s industry.

Rhetorical analysis/Reflection

The economic effect of Petroleum Rhetorical Analysis

 

Petroleum prices in recent decades have been majorly influenced by the middle east and were a means of the Middle East to show their ideas and beliefs. In an article called the coupled cycles of geopolitics and oil prices, authors Mahmoud A. El-Gamal and Amy Myers Jaffe write about how the geographic contents of nations affect oil prices. Countries such as Israel who are allies with the United States are majorly affected in the increase of oil prices since the Middle Eastern countries (Iran, Saudi Arabia), do not like Israel as a State. Another article titled; Oil industry fights ban on exploring the North Sea, by Greig Cameron shares his study on the economic loss of the oil industry in the UK. thousands of Europeans are losing jobs careers and other forms of employment because of the loss in the oil industry. Lastly, an article titled Gas prices May be 4$ in the Summer, written by Clifford Krauss shows us that oil prices are significantly going to increase in the summer due to the lack of companies pumping in the United States. The author uses word choice such as tension, to describe the Middle East since wars are driving oil prices to go up worldwide. Given the data and finding used in the lab report and articles, the authors were able to articulate their views and define them well to their audiences. They all used different word choices to portray their ideas of the middle east and show it is in chaos causing the oil industry in the world to tarnish with high oil prices.

One of the main qualities to look at in a lab report and articles are the keywords. Noticing these keywords allows the audience to identify them later on in the text and realizing the main idea the author is portraying. An excellent lap report would include an important keyword that contributes throughout the lap report and also contributing to the main idea. An important keyword used by Mahmoud A. El-Gamal and Amy Myers Jaffe (2018) is “wars”. Wars are the main reason why oil prices would increase, and it relates to the conflict in the middle east. The war between Saudi Arabia and Yemen caused more tension between Iran and Saudi Arabia on the domination of the oil industry. “Saudi-Yemen war has not only created a devastating humanitarian crisis but also increased the chances of more direct conflict between Saudi Arabia and Iran that could lead to Bombardment of critical infrastructure,” (p.5). Using war in the beginning of the sentence the authors imply the destruction it has on not only human lives but also the destruction of infrastructure representing the oil industry in the middle east. Furthermore, the authors Mahmoud A. El-Gamal and Amy Myers Jaffe (2019) repeat war later on in the text to further add on to their main idea. “Therefore, they predicted that if no significant war would erupt in the aftermath and slash or as a result of the Arab Spring uprisings, oil prices would have to fall precipitously within the medium term, as a have done in fact,” (p.6). “War” is repeated multiple times in the text because it connects the idea that war and gas prices are linked together.

On the other hand, the keyword “inflation” from Clifford Krauss (2021) is very vague throughout the text. The main point of the whole title Gas prices May be 4$ in the Summer is due to the point of the word “inflation”. However, even though being very important the word does not seem repeated more than once throughout the text. It was only repeated relatively in the starting paragraphs but was not seemed to be repeated again. Inflation is the reason why gas prices could possibly be 4$ in the summer. After all, the whole concept of the report is trying to discuss why it can happen and explains the wars in the middle east being a factor. However, Clifford Krauss (2021) fails to link inflation with the wars in the Middle East and how it can affect gas prices across the world. There is a lack of information in detail throughout the report, which makes the audience question the author and why is he even writing this report. No sense is written in the report explaining what is “inflation” economic perspective which leaves the reader confused. Besides the inefficiency, the main point the author tries to get across is that the Middle East is in chaos and tries hard to connect the wars with inflation of oil prices. Not repeating and explaining the word “inflation” is the downfall of the report, it focuses on more of the Middle East than “inflation” itself.

In a lab report, it is always better to define unknown terms and keep sentence structure short, simple, and comprehendible. In doing so the audience is expanded, meaning more people are able to read it other than just hardcore scientists. Long sentence structures are unamusing very complex to understand and dictate. Nevertheless, a short sentence structure allows a reader to comprehend what the author is trying to say. Using periods, commas, semicolons, or other forms to break up a sentence is quite in handy. In the Oil industry fights ban on exploring the North Sea, Greig Cameron (2021) uses short sentence structures and interviews to talk about how unemployment is on the rise in the oil industry in the UK.

“He added: “It will harm a recovery in our sector, which will cost jobs in our communities across the UK.”

The body estimates that between 25,000 and 30,000 jobs have been lost over the course of the pandemic.”

Adding these short sentence structures and spaces shows the effect of damage caused, leading to unemployment. Reading in between the lines is what Cameron (2021) does best, it makes the audience not only interested but also invested. These sentence breakups and spaces give more power to Cameron’s (2021) main point on the effect it has on the oil industry ban on exploring the North Sea.

“Another good example is the industry is believed to be responsible for about 270,000 positions across the UK.

In December, Denmark’s politicians voted to cancel the country’s next offshore licensing round as part of its plans to end fossil fuel extraction by 2050.”

He shows that canceling the extraction of fossil fuels is leading hundreds of thousands of workers to become unemployed. All of the reports are structuralized in this sort of manner of short sentences and spaces between almost every line or two. Reading these reports and statistics makes the audience more engaged and fun. Cameron (2021) writes in this form of style to break down information more clearly and also very powerful. Making each sentence having its own importance throughout the text.

In conclusion, technical writing requires a lot of patience and details regarding their topic. Writers can have difficult times writing pieces that are very hard to understand and explain to a regular audience. However, using word choices and sentence structures can help better dictate the text and help to amplify their thesis. These two qualities can help amplify the quality of any lap report and piece of technical writing. Word choices allow the audience to recognize the word is being used throughout the text and show its importance. Simplicity is the best perfection. Sentence structures and breaks between transitions make the quality of any writing better. Allowing the audience to go from one topic to another smoothly, makes the flow of the text excellent.

 

 

 

References:

  1. Cameron G. (2021, March 16). Oil industry fights ban on exploring North Sea. Times[London, England], 21. https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A655124366/AONE?u=cuny_ccny&sid=AONE&xid=fbfb810b
  2. El-Gamal, M. A., & Jaffe, A. M. (2018). The Coupled Cycles of Geopolitics and Oil Prices. Economics of Energy & Environmental Policy7(2), 1+. https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A556734236/AONE?u=cuny_ccny&sid=AONE&xid=3e9cd391

Krauss, C. (2021, March 15). Gas Prices May Be $4 By Summer. New York Times, B1(L). https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A654974218/AONE?u=cuny_ccny&sid=AONE&xid=435b9c49

Rhetorical Analysis Reflection

My rhetorical analysis is about the economic effect of petroleum around the world. All the lab reports genre/text were very similar, and I discussed the different types of English they use to portray their beliefs. Each lab report had a different case and used different keywords to convey to the audience about the petroleum world. My rhetorical analysis did not explain who the audience but did in fact the genre and text. The purpose throughout my rhetorical analysis is to differentiate each lab report and I did that clearly. The tone was not discussed as much in my rhetorical analysis because I was using the tone of the other lab reports.

The context and setting were very clear throughout the whole assignment. Each paragraph represented a new country from a different lab report to show other views and perspectives. My reflection does adhere to the conventions of academic writing. It is well written and has appropriate technical writing for the topic at hand (rhetorical analysis). My reflection has appropriate sentences and mechanics that follow the rules of academic writing. My rhetorical analysis did help me achieve some of the learning course outcomes. The assignment has made me improve on drawing out resources and developing a rhetorical sensibility.

My rhetorical analysis enhanced my drafting, editing self-assessment reading, and revising tremendously. This is because I have read many lab reports that required dramatically appropriate technical writing. I did not negotiate my audience’s expectations of convictions of rhetorical situations. Reading lab reports has made me develop and engage in the collaborative and social aspects of the writing process. They help me engage in general analysis and multimodal composing in exploring effective writing across disciplinary contacts. Another factor is it helps me choose a side and helps my case in defending it. However, it did not help me practice various library resources and online databases using the CUNY library. Overall, it improved my source use practices such as summarizing paraphrasing, analyzing sources, and citing.

Memo

Community Needs Cleaning

Dear, Eric Adams

The Problem

Hello, my name is Hussian Mohammed and I have lived in the King’s county area since I was in first grade. The majority of my childhood was being raised here and it is filled with so many fond memories that I can never forget. However, I am writing today because I have an issue concerning the community that I live in with my fellow neighbors and would like to address this topic with you. Everyone can agree with me that nobody likes the displeasing sight and smell of waste in their neighborhood. This has been a consistent issue within my community, for the past couple of years.  

Context

Garbage and waste have been filling this community with displeasure, which leads to the infestation of many dirty rodents and harmful insects. This is a major problem that needs to be solved because it is affecting many community members that have families and want to keep them safe especially during this unprecedented time when we all are battling the deadly virus known to mankind as Covid-19. In the article called Household Garbage written by Calvet da Silvera, he writes “The relationship between environment and health was primarily seen as the presence of open sewage, with accumulated or scattered garbage coming second” (Abstract,2012). The public ignores the harmful toxins and waste on their streets because it is something that they do not pay attention too. The budgeting issue has been a problem worldwide especially in the United States, I also understand governments are looking for ways to find money to help rebuild the communities. Economical wise with the unemployment rates being sky high, the creation of new jobs in sanitation, or the creation of other cleaning teams of local communities will lead to new jobs, that will benefit my community in becoming prosperous. 

Experience

            My experience with garbage waste is very shocking, the abnormal amount of waste in my own community is purely disgusting. One day I was walking home from work and it was very late at night around 11 pm. Then suddenly a strange horrific smell of mixed garbage was illuminating from the streets and created a scent so dreadful my nose was thankful that there is a mask covering my face. This continuous stinky smell was on the scent of many streets throughout the radius of my house in the Kings county in Brooklyn. At that moment I wanted change, because the streets are dirty, we need to clean it up, because it is our home.

Resolution

Solving this problem can also help alleviate the Covid-19 problems since having cleaner streets, can also slow the spread of the virus. For example, South Korea had an efficient plan on slowing the spread of not only coronavirus, but other harmful bacteria’s, or viruses affecting the country. South Korea had a cleaning team, who put more effort into cleaning areas that are more urbanized and disinfecting their streets. Statistics have shown that South Korea has one of the least numbers of COVID-19 cases as of today. Their methods of cleaning helped to not only slow the spread of this deadly virus but also saved many lives from catching the virus. We should learn and replicate nations that are succeeding to clean our streets. The federal government of South Korea could not provide all of their attention on all of the streets in the nation, but they relied on the local communities to perform and disinfect their own streets and this huge scale organized operation allowed a better, safer, and cleaner place for a majority of streets in South Korea.

This is why I am writing my concerns to you and putting efforts to have an emphasis on cleaning my community. In doing so, others will follow creating a domino effect of cleaner streets not only in my community but others. On the last note, I appreciate everything that you have done, and I hope you take this concern of mine into great consideration as it can help save lives, and also boost your reputation. 

Sincerely,

Hussian Mohammed

Resources

  1. https://web-a-ebscohost-com.ccny-proxy1.libr.ccny.cuny.edu/ehost/detail/detail?vid=3&sid=81fa1451-d61b-4a2e-af93-faa087f8f81d%40sessionmgr4007&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZQ%3d%3d#db=ccm&AN=108098097
  2. https://www.cidrap.umn.edu/news-perspective/2020/12/south-korea-among-several-nations-eyeing-lockdowns

Memo Reflection

In my Memo I discussed the excess amount of garbage and trash in my neighborhood because it was extremely disgusting and needed to be addressed to a person of position. I was motivated and passionate to write about this since this is my home and my character as a person is very clean and I hate dirty conditions. When streets are clean it is more presentable and could even increase the economy of any local community from tourism, for example a person eating at a local restaurant. The audience is Eric Adams which is a someone in high position in the Kings county area which is my area.

            The topic and genre are discussed all throughout my Memo as I used repetition with the words waste and garbage. In my introduction and context, the topics are addressed and showing the problem. The purpose was discussed in the concluding part of my Memo because I was writing to him so he can follow my solutions. My purpose was to show the problem, and making my audience realize the problem and give them responsibility to fix it. The tone was not really discussed throughout my Memo. My emotions were trying to show the tone as disgust, but I did not address the tone head on. The setting and context were prevalent in the beginning part of my Memo, as I discussed my community and the area. However, the settings changed throughout my essay due to the fact I was comparing other communities in countries with my own.

My reflection is very organized in paragraphs and each section has its own bold heading to show the topic being discussed in the paragraph underneath. It shows my depth and understanding of organization and separates my problem, context, experience, and solution. My reflection does adhere to the conventions of academic writing, but I have still a lot to improve on. I went to a very shitty high school that never challenged my academic writing ability and have been catching up in college ever since. I am taking this class to maximize and improve my ability in writing and to write well thought out papers that can help me in the future. My reflections do not use appropriate mechanics and grammar and I have always been having trouble with this. I have been struggling with grammar issues because I have not always lived in the United States, but I am always looking to improve and use the appropriate language in my writing.

This particular did in fact help me achieve the course learning outcomes and expanded my knowledge in reading and writing. For reading, it helped me annotate other people’s point of views and differentiate the similarities and differences with my own. It made me revise myself and the importance of a draft since it can gather my thoughts and organize them accordingly in the final essay. With writing it helps me purvey my ideas more clearly/effectively which helps the audience as they know what I am talking about. This Memo helped me use my resources from the database, but I only used two, I have still a lot to work on with providing resources. I do know where to look for resources though and this should help me find more in the future.

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